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간지 | 2009.12.09 | 조회 136

Here is A and B. A is so beautiful person, she has also high-end cars and homes. but she only knew just herself. she doesn't have any boy friend yet. because she doesn't care to anybody but only care herself.


B is not beautiful, also she don't have any cars or homes. but she has scores of attraction. for example, she is deliberate, honest, humorous and truthful. she know love. she know how to reach out somebody.


Here is M(match-maker). M is giving more point to A rather than B. ability and appearance is more important on the meeting between man and woman.


those relations are wide-spreading in our society. it can be fatal to all of us. if those problems continue, we could lose jem and we couldn't find man or woman who is good personality. because it's getting important on just appearance and what does he or she have rather than who is he or she.


we have to make alternative measurements on how to deal with those problems and get through it before it can't be changed.


I think the most important thing on the people is trust. of course, ability and appearance is important condition he or she on the date. but, without trust between he and she, it could be eccentric relationship. so be very careful, appearance and money is profitable in short term but not in long term. but if you take other view to someone rather than what he or she have and looks, you will be rewarding and you maybe the one of precious person in the world.


where are they?


look beside on you. it maybe under your nose.


 


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