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do you think it is better to exercise outdoors? or inside a gym?

I think it’s better to exercise outdoors why
I think there is a reason why I thinks in this way.

First, I think it is better to exercise
outdoor is more exiting. -> 이유를 뒷받침할만한 예시를 첨부해주면 내용이 풍성해집니다 

Second, according to newspaper that I read
a newspaper on the internet, many experts in that field also insist as I said. They there are many experts.. I don’t remember actually… but I believe press release. ->전문가들이 그렇게 말한 이유를 좀 더 구체적으로 풀어주세요. 

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