책보면서 구조 연습중인데.. 너무 정형화 되어있는 자기소개 같아서
고득점을 위해 고쳐야할 부분이 있거나 추가하면 좋겠는 부분들 첨삭 부탁드려요!
Hi, eva.
My name is Sori An and I'm 25 years old.
I live in a house in Seoul with my family.
There are four members in my family that included my father, mother, younger sister and I.
It is located in a central of Seoul, so it is good for regional accessibility.
I'm currently a senior majoring in security of information, that is kind of Computer department.
I chose this major because security of information is a subject that has always fascinated me.
I applyed for a leave of absence from school last year and then I traveled in Europe recently.
For that reason, my hobbies these days include traveling overseas and enjoying leisure activities.
When it comes to personality, I'm an outgoing person. I like to hang out many friends.
People have told me that I have an open-minded personality.
Also I'm a senior and looking for a job these days. Someday I hope to work for a major company.
The competition is fierce in today's job market, so I'm ready to start study hard to make my dream a reality.
That's all I can tell you about me. Thank you.
1