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I don't think watching television is an appropriate way for children to use their free time and there are 2 reasons to support my idea. Firstly, watching television is not good for a children's mental health. According to the experiment from California University, watching television stimulates bad hormone of children. So it has bad influence on children's mental growth. Secondly it is not good for children's physical growth. Usually, when watching television, children don't move for a long time, so it is not good for children's physical health such as spine. So I think there are some better ways to use their free time. For these reasons, I don't think watching television is an appropriate way for children to use their free time.

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