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첨삭지기 | 2025.02.24 | 조회 214

⇒ 침실 2개 ⇒ 입장 ⇒ 오른쪽 [엄마방, 화장실] ⇒ 왼쪽 [거실, 내 방] ⇒ 좋은 이유


I live a two-bedroom apartment. When you walk in the front door, you can see an entrance area where you can take off your shoes. on To the right is my mother’s bedroom, and there is also a toilet on the right. On the left is a living room, and next to it, you can see my bedroom. My house is very cozy and bright.


⇒ 방 분위기 ⇒ 선호 : 나만을 위한 공간 ⇒ 선호 : 비싼 컴퓨터 ⇒ 방 들어오면 책상 침대 ⇒ 오른쪽 책장 ⇒ 방에 만족


I think my room is very cozy. I love my room because it’s my own private space, only for me. where I can have enjoy quiet moments by myself without any distractions. Another reason is that I like my room is that I have an expensive computer, which allows me to so I can play games and work efficiently. When you walk into my room, you can see a desk and a bed. On To the right, there is a bookshelf. I am very satisfied with my room.


⇒ 평일 바쁨 ⇒ 주말에 시간 보냄 ⇒ 같이 청소 ⇒ 나는 욕실 침실 ⇒ 엄마 설거지 및 빨래 ⇒ 끝난 후 얘기 나눔 ⇒ 주로 거실에서 시간을 보냄


Well…. I am very busy during the week, so I usually spend time with my family on weekends. We usually often clean the home together. Whilemy mother washes the dishes and does the laundry, I clean the bathroom and the bedrooms. After we finish finishing the cleaning, we often talk about current events in living room. My Our home house is very cozy, so we enjoy spending time there.


⇒ 아파트 ⇒ redecorate ⇒ 소파버림 ⇒ 오래됨, 공간차지 ⇒ 소파 버린 후 넓고 쾌적 ⇒ 옷걸이도 구매 ⇒ 설치 ⇒ 거실에 만족


I live in an apartment, and I recently redecorated my living room. I threw decided to throw away a the sofa. this is because it was old and took up too much space. Since I got rid of it the sofa, I have felt that the living room has felt was more spacious and tidy cleaner. I also decided to purchase a clothes standFinally, I put up and set it up the clothes stand in living room. Now, I am satisfied with my living room.


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