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I think it’s better to exercise in a gym with equipment.
Let me explain why I think this way side.
I agree like at gym with equipment.
Because in this season the weather is very hot,
But the gym has air conditioning, who makes it more comfortable.
I want to cold air, but this season is very hot.
Gym has air conditioners, so I want to this condition.
So, therefore I agree with this statement .
And Also, I want to exercise like exercising with equipment, and the gym has plenty of it, while outdoor does not.
so gym has many equipment, but Exercise outdoors is not.
-> 주어진 질문에 대한 자신의 의견을 잘 작성해 주셨지만 전반적으로 어색한 부분이 많아 자연스럽게 수정이 필요했습니다. 수고하셨습니다.
※ 이 게시글은 토익스피킹 점수예측서비스 참여자 답변에 대한 1:1 첨삭입니다.





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