해커스토익스피킹 점수예측서비스 첨삭부탁드립니다.
I think it is better to exercise outdoors. Let me explain why I think this way. Most First of all, we can save our money. These days, the cost of living is super very high. From my own experience, I started jogging yester year, last year, For me,and it was very helpful because I was able to save my budget and I start to invest in another things.
On top of that, we can save our time That is because we can do exercise any time and anywhere when we are want. For these reasons, this reason, I think exercising outdoors is better. this way.
-> 질문에 대한 답변을 잘 작성해 주셨지만 어색한 부분이 발견되어 수정이 필요했습니다. 수고하셨습니다.
※ 이 게시글은 토익스피킹 점수예측서비스 참여자 답변에 대한 1:1 첨삭입니다.
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