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I think it is better to exercise outdoors. Let me explain why I do think so. First, I am a student, so my budget is tight. For From my experience, I was not able to gym because it's very higher cost. I can’t really afford to go to the gym because the membership fee is quite expensive. And Second, I can save my money. exercising outdoors helps me save money. I don't have to spend money one a gym, and I can still stay healthy. want to rest of money in a gym.
-> 문법, 문맥에서 많은 오류가 발생하여 전반적인 수정이 필요했습니다. 조금 더 완벽한 문장을 구사하시는 연습이 필요할 것 같습니다. 수고하셨습니다.
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