I think it's more better, more better as exercise outdoor than gym with equipment. And first, if you going hang out with your friends or other people and exercise outdoors, it's make a more communication and then more make a experience. And then when I was high school student, I went to and exercise in Jeju Island with my friends. It's very good experience, and I make good memories with my friends. So I think that exercise outdoor is important.
I think exercising outdoors is better than working out at the gym with exercise equipment. First, if you exercise outdoors with your friends or other people, you can communicate more and make great memories together. For example, when I was a high school student, I went hiking in Jeju Island with my friends. It was a great experience, and I made many wonderful memories with them. That’s why I think exercising outdoors is more enjoyable and beneficial.
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