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I think it is better to exercise outdoors. Let me explain why I think so. Most of all, it is good for my mental health. Also, I can meet new people and broaden my perspective. For example, according to a recent news report, many people said it is better to exercise that exercising outdoors is beneficial because they can meet new people and broaden their perspective. So, For these reasons, I think it is better to exercise outdoors.
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