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I think it is better to exercise outdoors rather than in a gym with equipment. There are some reasons to support my opinion. First, we can get some fresh air, and then because of it, we can make our body so healthy. Because of these reasons, which can help me stay healthy. And I can enjoy working out with friends together. For these reasons, I believe exercise exercising outdoors is better.
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