해커스토익스피킹 점수예측서비스 Q11 첨삭부탁드립니다.

I think it is better to exercise in a gym with equipment.

For the following reasons.

In my caseFirst, I usually go to the gym to exercise.

It’s because I can try various equipment and I can try various exercises.many kinds of equipments.

Second, there are professionals with a lot of skills in the gym. many skills expert.

So, I can learn how to use the equipment exactly.

So, I can do exercise better.

The last reason one is I can be motivated by others to exercise by other people who work out at the gym.

So, I can exercise regularly and free complete.

It helps me exercise regularly.

Therefore I think thus way.

For these reasons, I think it is better to exercise in a gym with equipment.

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