해커스토익스피킹 점수예측서비스 문제 첨삭부탁드립니다.

Personally, I personally think it is better to exercise outdoors.

There are a couple of several reasons why.

Most of all it’s because I like outdoor activities.

Come to think of it, I think I’ve liked to exercise outside since I was young.

And If I exercise outside, I can feel sunshine. It makes me feel relaxed.

And I can only focus on my exercise. 

That’s because I think it’s better to exercise outdoors.

In my case, well I was young, I wanted to exercise outdoors.

It’s very happy and really helpful.

Because outdoor have many fitness.

-> 문장에서 많은 오류가 발견됩니다. 또한 주어진 시간에 맞춰 조금 더 구체적인 이유를 설명해 주시는 것이 좋을 것 같습니다.

수고하셨습니다.

※ 이 게시글은 토익스피킹 점수예측서비스 참여자 답변에 대한 1:1 첨삭입니다.