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In my opinion, Outdoor exercise is better than in a gym exercise with equipment.

Because there are three reasons for that.

The first, thing is exercising I find outdoor exercise is more fun.

Because I can always see and feel different views.

we I can enjoy nature and find the natural view and other animals and some

We can also some enjoy the changing view 

and some our exercising is more fun.

It makes me want to exercise outdoors.

Also, The second reason thing is the air condition.

The air in a gym air condition is not good. very some bad.

The indoor space is difficult to ventilate and smells of people’s sweat.

Because there are clothes and also people’s sweat smell.

Also it’s how to do our go to gym every day.

The last reason is thing is about a money then.

It doesn’t cost money to do outdoor exercise.

If we exercise outdoor we do not spend our money for gym then.

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