해커스토익스피킹 점수예측서비스 문제 첨삭부탁드립니다.
I think it’s better to exercise outdoors than in a gym with equipment.
There are is a few reasons for that.
First, if you exercise outdoors, you can breathe fresh air.
And fresh air makes exercise more efficient.
And Second, it is more exercise outdoor is more fun to exercise outdoors than in a gym.
For example, treadmill is too so boring.
I can only run on treadmills by 20 minutes when I run on a treadmill in the gym.
But when I run outdoors, I running in the outdoor, I can run one for an hour.
-> 사소한 실수가 많아 수정이 필요했습니다. 조금 더 완벽한 문장을 구사하시는 게 중요할 것 같습니다. 수고하셨습니다.
※ 이 게시글은 토익스피킹 점수예측서비스 참여자 답변에 대한 1:1 첨삭입니다.





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