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To exercise outdoor, I prefer exercising outdoors to exercising in a gym with equipment. to exercise outdoor.
Because most, First, I think nature have a good effect on the body. I can breathe healthier air than exercising indoors. I can be healthy.
Because Natural is very good.
Second, I can save much money for exercise.
Because I don’t need money If I exercise outdoors. To exercise outdoors don’t need money.
Therefore, I think exercising outdoors is very good than exercising in a gym with equipment. To exercise outdoors is very good.
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