해커스토익스피킹 점수예측서비스 문제 첨삭부탁드립니다.
I think it is better to exercise outdoors.
This is because we I can exercise with my friends.
When I was in a high school student, I exercised in a gym with equipment.
So, I am But, I always had to work out alone and felt bored.
After that, I started sports that I can do outdoors like soccer and tennis, and I can make many friends thanks to this.
But, now a days I like soccer and tennis like exercise outdoors.
Then As a result I can make a lot of friends by soccer and tennis.
Therefore, I think it is better to exercise outdoors than in a gym with equipment.
-> 전반적으로 질문에 대한 답변을 구체적으로 잘 작성해 주셨지만, 어색한 부분에 대한 수정이 필요했습니다. 수고하셨습니다.
※ 이 게시글은 토익스피킹 점수예측서비스 참여자 답변에 대한 1:1 첨삭입니다.





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