수행1.Volunteering brings personal development by
boosting self esteem, and it enables you to connect to people. Lastly, it
improves your outlook. We should help others in order to make our society
healthy. Without help, a society would be overflowed with selfishness. I think
this unconditional consideration has amazing ability to affect human’s mind. I once
volunteered in the Senior Care center, and it was a warm-hearted experience.
수행2.When I was fifth grade, my family was on a trip for
healing in Malaysia, my real homeland. The country’s rich culture is seen in
its buildings and natural environment. Since Malaysia is largely Muslim, it has
many mosque temples. I was significantly impressed about its colourful
geometric pattern designs. Malaysia has numerous ethnic groups, each with its
own traditions. I also had a visit to my previous international school.
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수행1. has amazing ability to --> has an amazing ability to
수행2. was on a trip --> went on a trip