8/3 토스 파트5 첨삭부탁드리겠습니다 (오프토픽 여부)
1. I agree that employees ~~
2. Most of all, many employees get much very stressed.
3. So, they can’t focus on their work.
4. For example, when I was in high school, I had to study hard.
5. So I became very got much stressed.
6. But my teacher gave me a solution.
7. It is was helpful for me, so I was able to could focus on my studies.
8. As a result, I got could get good grades and became more at school, and i was interested in studying.
-> 어색한 부분에 대한 첨삭을 도와드렸습니다. 수고하셨습니다.
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