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첨삭지기 | 2023.11.21 | 조회 109

Q1. What is your position in your company?
What are your duties and responsibilities? Give me as many details as you can.




A1. I am a registered nurse in the
anesthetic part.  
anesthesiology department.

My responsibilities include preparing drugs and equipment
before a surgery and taking care of patients after a surgery. During the
surgery, I mostly assist doctors. I connect and inject the anesthetic medicines
to put patients sleep. After patients fall asleep, I 
check their vital sign and
control the anesthetic gas and medicines. 

And our department sometimes present
about medical equipment we use, each part’s surgical procedure and a review of
the thesis.


Sometimes we have to present the surgical procedure, medical equipment we use and a review of the thesis.


-> 발표 대상을 명확하게 표현하는 것이 좋을 것 같습니다.




Q2. Please tell me about the most memorable
training you have had in your company. What kind of training was it? Why was it
memorable? Provide as many details possible.




A2. The most memorable training I’ve had
was CPR education. 

It was memorable because it is useful both inside and
outside of the hospital.

-> 문맥과 어울리지 않아 생략하거나 마지막으로 옮기는 것이 좋을 것 같습니다.


 And It hasn't been long since I joined the company so I
took pride in becoming a medical professional. At first, I watch the video
about CPR and practice chest compression repeating 30 times twice on a dummy.
After the practical training, I was chosen by the presenter so I demonstrate
CPR on a dummy in front of about 50 employees. I felt embarrassed but I do my
best.



 First of all, we watched a video about CPR and practiced chest compression twice, 30 times on a dummy. After that, i was singled out by the educator and demonstrated in front of about 50 employees. I felt really embarrassed but I did my best. 


-> 시제 사용에 유의하셔야 할 것 같습니다.





Q3. Did you ever have a problem with a
particular project? What was the problem and how was it resolved? Please
provide as many details as possible.




A3. Our department
execute project about had a project about  how to operate a medical device.


 Each employees have to give
a presentation about it and It happened 
once or twice a year.

But I was always stressed by it. I have had a hard time finding specific materials related to it and making presentation materials. 

So,
I searched for it  on the Internet and YouTube or asked the person in charge for the product
manual



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