해커스토익스피킹 점수예측서비스 첨삭부탁드립니다.

I think go going to the gym is better than exercise exercising outdoors.

Because gym have many exercise for me.

I can do various exercises for a long time at the gym.

But, exercise outdoors is that running.

There’s nothing to do outside except running.

And In winter, it’s too cold outside to exercise,

But the gym is warm and not cold. It’s hot.

But, Outdoors is so cold.

In body is cold exercise is too dangerous.

That’s why I think going to the gym is better than exercising outdoors.

->문법적 오류가 많아 많은 수정이 필요했습니다.

※ 이 게시글은 토익스피킹 점수예측서비스 참여자 답변에 대한 1:1 첨삭입니다.